Thursday, July 26, 2012

Gift Box Giveaway including Veil of Pearls by MaryLu Tyndall Ends July 30th



We are having a week long celebration here at The Sword and Spirit for MaryLu Tyndall's new release, Veil of Pearls. In celebration, I've ordered our cake from my favorite baker. Today we are giving away a Bath Gift Box. Ask MaryLu a question or leave a comment to be entered in the drawing.  We will be giving prizes away all week long so be sure to check in each day.
  I am so pleased to have my very dear friend, MaryLu Tyndall here with me this week. MaryLu mentored me and was huge influence on me. She was my guiding star as I started down the road of writing. 
As tribute to MaryLu and her love for tall ships I'm giving away a vintage collector's serving tray with other goodies. The package includes, tray, notecards, Twinings specialty loose tea, a tea ball, Ghiradelli hot chocolate, a small bath tin, a metal kitty bookmarker, and the giveaway wouldn't be comeplete without MaryLu's new release, Veil of Pearls.

How to add description to your story without boring your reader!

By MaryLu Tyndall
Let's face it, some of those old time novels could get mighty lengthy on the old description.  Zzzzzzzzzz.  Talk about boring. If you're going to spend a page describing the scenery, I've already closed the book and moved onto something else. Yes, I'm that neurotic!  More like OCD distracted. Besides, in the pre-TV past, people had more patience and more time, but in the age of instant gratification, we want to jump right into the action.
I'm not really a detail person. I like the overall picture, a hint of two about the scenery and characters and then let's dive into the DRAMA.  Love drama on TV and in books. Not so much in real life.  Anyway, so how do you give the reader a sense of the surroundings and what the characters look like without putting them to sleep?
Simple. If you can't write a story without description (which I don't recommend), then make description part of the story!
Just like turning setting into a character, you can transform description into part of the character's experience.  What you want to avoid is writing a laundry list of descriptors such as. . .She entered the room. Glittering sconces lined the walls and chandeliers hung from the ceiling. The foyer was large and crowded with people. An orchestra played.  Intricately carved crown molding lined the ceiling above Dutch floral paintings.
(Yawn....  Oh, sorry, I drifted off.) 
Here’s the same scene described as part of the action and the character’s emotions (Taken from  Veil of Pearls, my new release)
Light from hundreds of glittering sconces and chandeliers blinded her. She blinked as they greeted the host and hostess, both of whom barely acknowledged her. . . .The foyer was ten times the size of the Doctor’s and abuzz with chattering people who all shot their gazes her way to see what strange oddity Mr. Rutledge had brought to the party. Orchestra music drifted atop beaded and jeweled coiffures from a room to their left. A butler took Mr. Rutledge's cape and hat and her shawl before she could protest. She didn’t plan on staying that long. Mr. Rutledge patted her hand and led her into the massive ball room. The first thing Adalia noticed was how large the room was, the second, the intricately carved crown molding lining the ceiling above Dutch floral paintings and crystalline chandeliers—such beauty and lavishness she’d never seen. The third thing she noticed was that once again everyone turned to stare at her. In fact, the chattering faded to clandestine whispers as ladies leaned together behind fans.
The best way to write description is:
Show how your character reacts to his or her surroundings
Interject action among the description
Allow the setting to interact with the description
  • The lights are bright. They blind her and she blinks.   
  • Instead of just saying there were a lot of people, show how your character sees them and how they sound. Abuzz with chattering people.  
  • Instead of just saying that the character heard music, combine the music with an added description of the people.  Orchestra music drifted atop beaded and jeweled coiffures
  • Notice there's action incorporated into the description. A butler takes their cape and hat. Her escort leads her into the room.
  •  And finally we have the description of the crown molding and paintings, followed by her reaction to them, such beauty and lavishness she'd never seen.  You can almost feel her awe and wonder!
And the same thing applies to descriptions of people
The old, boring way: Mr. Rutledge seemed quite the don juan. He was handsome, wore a simple linen shirt, waistcoat and trousers tucked within high boots. He had wheat-colored hair, green eyes, and dark whiskers on his chin. 
A better way:  By the way the ladies lining the marketplace gaped at him, Adalia assumed Mr. Rutledge was quite the don juan. Perhaps he wished to add another feather to his cap with the new lady in town. No doubt most servant girls would swoon over any attention paid them by this handsome, wealthy rake. For he was handsome, indeed. Even more handsome than she remembered. His face no longer held that look of abject boredom so often found on the spawn of the tediously affluent.  In fact, he seemed much more alive. Maybe his common attire—a simple linen shirt, waistcoat, and trousers tucked within high boots—brought his usual arrogance down to a manageable level. In any case, it couldn’t hurt to enjoy the way his wheat-colored hair flung about him in wild abandon, the sprinkle of dark whiskers on his chin, and even the spark of mischief in his stark green eyes. Though she’d spurned him, he held himself with authority as he awaited her reply.  
  • By showing how others react to Mr. Rutledge, the reader gets a good feeling of his appearance. the ladies lining the marketplace gaped at him  and swoon over any attention paid them by this handsome, wealthy rake
  • This statement not only gives us a hint of his expression, but gives us great insight into our character's opinion of the wealthy.  His face no longer held that look of abject boredom so often found on the spawn of the tediously affluent.
  • Again, our character is reacting to the sight of Mr. Rutledge when she says brought his usual arrogance down to a manageable level.   The reader sees that his current attire is not as fancy as what he normally wears. Plus we realize she thinks he is arrogant.
  • We have the wind interacting with Mr. Rutledge's face:  wheat-colored hair flung about him in wild abandon,
  • And instead of just saying he had green eyes, we see them through our character's eyes.... she sees the spark of mischief. 
 So, don't bore your readers!  Jump into your character's skin and show us how he or she reacts to what they see. It takes a little more work but the result is worth it!
Happy Writing and Reading!


 Veil of Pearls!
It is 1811, and the prosperous port city of Charleston is bustling with plantation owners, slaves, and immigrants. Immigrants such as the raven-haired Adalia Winston. But Adalia has a secret: her light skin belies that she is part black and a runaway slave from Barbados. Skilled in herbal remedies, Adalia finds employment with a local doctor and settles into a quiet life, thankful for her freedom but still fearful that her owner will find her.

Born into one of Charleston's prominent families, Morgan Rutledge is handsome, bored—and enamored of the beautiful Adalia, who spurns his advances. Morgan's persistence, however, finally wins, and Adalia is swept into the glamorous world of Charleston high society.

But Adalia's new life comes at a high price—that of denying her heritage and her zeal for God. How far is she willing to go to win the heart of the man she loves? And when her secret is revealed, will that love be enough, or will the truth ruin Morgan and send Adalia back into slavery?
              
   
 MaryLu Tyndall's Bio
A Christy Award finalist and best-selling author, MaryLu Tyndall dreamt of tall ships and swashbuckling pirates during her childhood years on Florida’s Atlantic Coast. Unfortunately, instead of pursuing that dream, she worked as a miserable, landlocked software engineer for fifteen years. Only by the grace and providence of God, did she decide to answer His call to write a Christian Pirate series. Today, while writing her eleventh novel, she manages a home, husband and six kids while battling three cats who have decided that her keyboard is the best place to sleep!  She believes that without popcorn and chocolate, life would not be worth living, and her sole motivation in life is to bring others closer to God.

DOUBLE YOUR CHANCES OF WINNING by following my blog with Powered by FEEDBURNER on the right, and don't miss any giveaways (the button with the flame). If you already follow my blog go ahead and follow by FEEDBURNER so you can be entered twice. If you're not getting an email telling you I have a new giveaway you're not following through Feedburner. Just mention that you follow through Feedburner when you leave a comment with each giveaway and you'll be entered twice.

Be sure to leave your email address. Please check your junk mail on and the day after the drawing. I've had to redraw because of no responses. Subject box will have: winner of (book title). I'll email the winner and they'll have seven days to respond. If I don't hear back I'll draw another name. USA shipping only. Thanks so much and please stop back again! Drawing will be held Monday,  July 30th 8:00 A.M. EST. Offer void where prohibited. Odds of winning vary due to the number of entrants.

163 comments:

  1. Good advice, as usual.

    Congratulations on this book. May it sell a gazillion copies.

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    1. Yes, just like advice from someone else that is a dear friend (wink, wink). Thanks for stopping by Laurie Alice.

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    2. Hi Laurie!!! So nice to see you here! From your lips to God's ears!

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    3. This is great advice and I look foward to more. It is my greatest dream to write a novel someday and I just don't know where to start. So I will start by reading your little tidbits, and taking lots of notes! :) And I wouldn't mind being entered into the drawing as well, lol!

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    4. Insightful, as always, MaryLu! :) I love reading your tips as much as I love reading your novels. I cannot wait to get my hands on Veil of Pearls! God bless xxx

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  2. Love your writing, MaryLu. Descriptions really help with all the senses and make the writing three dimensional. Congratulations on your release.

    blissful63(at)gmail(dot)com

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    1. Oh me, too, Lauralee. Marylu is a master at writing. I'm so blessed that God put her in my path when I started into this business. She has been such a blessing to me!

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    2. Thank you, Lauralee! I appreciate you dropping by. :-) And Debbie Lynne.. it's you who have blessed me with your sweet friendship. :-)

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  3. I would love to read this book! Please enter me in the drawing.

    Battles2001@hotmail.com

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    1. Throwing your name in the hat twice, Melissa! Thanks so much for following my blog.

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  4. Started following your blog.

    Battles2001@hotmail.com

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  5. Ugh, I hate paragraphs of description. So much so I err on the side of not describing enough. It's my weakness. One time I wrote something, 3 paragraphs worth and no one critting it said a thing, but it just plain bothered me because they were probably just happy I had some in there! :) And then on some read through I realized my character was "missing" even though it was more than just a laundry list, but her personal touch, the "why was she thinking about that right then" was missing. When I threw in a little mention of her it was all better. Exactly what you've suggested here, so good advice!

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    1. Many people don't realize just how hard writing can be. There's so much to remember but our creativity comes from our right brain where that stuff isn't stored! Sometimes I think my bridge between my left and right brains is down. LOL. I usually have to go over and over and over my scenes to make sure I've remembered everything. Uggg..

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    2. Fortunately, I have a crit partner who is awesome at descriptions. Unfortunately for her, I am not. :o) I'm always apologizing for all the work I cause her.

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    3. Melissa, I am suffering from the same thing. Thanks for the not about helping the character be there.

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  6. Great advice! Please enter my name in the giveaway. :)

    writer_weaver(at)yahoo(dot)com

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    1. Throwing your name in the hat now! Thanks for coming by Anna.

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  7. Enter me please...I would love to read your book. I could use a little "book" therapy right now. When life gets tough I don't shop, I read LOL

    winterrose at comcast dot net

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    1. I don't shop either, Louise.. Reading is great therapy!

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    2. Hey Louise,
      Thanks for coming by. I agree, reading is the best medicine out there!

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  8. My dad and I teach writing seminars frequently, and we say the same thing about adding description!

    I'm working on my third novel, so I'm practicing that every day.

    I'd like to be entered in the giveaway. I also followed your blog through google follower. :)


    legossi@gmail.com

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    1. Hi Amanda! Thanks! Keep working. I know I'm still learning and growing with each book I write.

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    2. Hey Amanda, thanks so much for being a follower! And congratulations on finishing 2 books. That takes a lot of dedication.

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  9. I love that advice. I am in the midst if writing a book so that totally helps!

    Melkatisaac(at) gmail(dot) com

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    1. Hey Lizzy, thanks for coming by. MaryLu is a great person to get writing advice from. You can count on it to be spot on!

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  10. Great advice! really like the comparisons of old way and new/better way of description. well done :)
    enter my name too please..

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    1. Hey Ruth, thanks for coming by. If you can stop back in and leave your email addy so I can contact you should you win. Good luck!

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  11. I just got home from exercise class at the Y and am having POPCORN for breakfast! As I read this post, I needed to move the page down with my left hand on the mousie! Better to read you by, my dear! Have a glorious day. Please enter me in the drawing for this book. Kathleen
    lanehillhouse[at]centurylink[dot]net

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    1. Popcorn for breakfast, Kathleen?? You're my kind of girl! popcorn is one of my favorite foods!!

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    2. LOL! You always make me smile Kathleen, the mother of the another Debbie Lynne without the "e". good luck and have a great day!

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  12. Great advice. One reason why Mary Lu's books pull the reader right into the story.

    Please enter me. I just subscribed through feedburner.

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    1. That's nice of you to say, Pam. Thanks. :-)

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    2. Hey Pam, MaryLu does have the magic touch for making you become a part of her story AND for making it impossible to put her books down!

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  13. I am a Google Friend Connect follower. Kathleen
    lanehillhouse[at]centurylink[dot]net

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  14. I receive Feedburner e-mail generated notes of your posts! Kathleen
    lanehillhouse[at]centurylink[dot]net

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  15. Wonderful advise for making a very descriptive paragraph! I always enjoy MaryLu's writing, and with each book that comes out, it always gets better and better! I seem to always get swept into the time period of the book and when out on the open blue waters, I can almost hear the waves crashing up against the vessel! :)

    CoopaTroopa04(at)hotmail.com(dot)com

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    1. Thank you, Tracy!! Love those sea-faring scenes!!

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    2. LOL! I can tell you read a lot of MaryLu's books Tracy! Good luck!

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    3. I do read a lot of MaryLu's books! Especially with the sea-faring scenes, when I grew up living right by Lake Michigan all my life and when I have been sailing myself since 1992 (about 20 years)! :)

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    4. Wow Tracy, I'm jealous! But in the nicest of ways!! lol. And I'll bet when MaryLu reads this she will be too!

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    5. She knows already before I posted this!

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  16. I just love MaryLu's writing style. She pulls me into the story and keeps me there, hungering for more even after the story is over.

    Please enter me into the drawing.

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    1. Hey Connie, I see we like the same kind of writers. MaryLu is awesome at what she does.

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    2. HI Connie!! Thanks for dropping by and saying such sweet things... and Debbie Lynne.. if you don't stop, you're going to make me blush! LOL

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    3. Yikes! You better stop reading! heehee

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  17. I adore the way you write such adventurous story-lines into your books, MaryLu. Thanks for the awesome post. :)

    crandallberries at gmail dot com

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    1. Hey Dawn, thanks for coming by. Have I said what a great writer MaryLu is? ;o)

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  18. I love how you draw people into the story. I enjoy a book so much more when I am able to feel like I am there. :)

    samanthaakuiper(at)gmail(dot)com

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    1. Thanks for coming by, Samantha! There is nothing like becoming a part of the story...especially when you're the heroine and you have a tall handsome hero staring back at you. heehee

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    2. There's a fine balance in using description.. and I don't think I always reach it.. Too much and you bore the reader, too little and you don't transport them into the story. Very difficult. Thanks for coming, Samantha!

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  19. I love Mary Lu Tyndall's writing and hope I can win this.

    Debbie Epperson
    dkepperson1@gmail.com

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  20. That's what I love about MaryLu's writing. It is so poetically lyrical that it instantly sweeps you into the characters' lives and feelings.

    Thank you for choosing not to be boring, MaryLu!

    theladyofshalott17(at)rocketmail(dot)com

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    1. Hey Lady! Thanks for coming by. good luck on winning. I picked one of Marylu's books up because of the picture and have read everyone of her books now. Can't get enough!

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    2. Wow.. lots of my readers have made an appearance here! Good to see you all! Love your email addy. "The lady of Shalott" !!

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  21. I absolutely love Marylu's books. They are wonderful!! She's one of my absolute top favorite writers, because I know that her books will never disappoint. They're filled with excitement, have fabulous chemistry between hero and heroine, and always have an inspiring faith message. If you haven't read one of Marylu's books, you're cheating yourself. Run out and buy one!

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    1. Oh I agree, Vickie. She is one of my all time favorites too!

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    2. Okay Vickie.. how much do I owe you for that? ;-)

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    3. I was so tickled to see that you are one of Vickie's favorites because she is one of my favorite authors right along with you!

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  22. What an amazing giveaway!! You hit the nail on the head. That is exactly what first drew me to MaryLu Tyndall's books was her description of scenes. So life like. You can almost smell the sea and taste the fear. I love it! :)

    I'm following with feedburner. :)

    Keep up the great writing, MaryLu! I'll keep being your biggest fan :)

    sheri.salatin(at)gmail.com

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    1. thank you for coming by and for following me Sheri. It's true you can almost smell the sea!

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    2. Sheri, you're a doll as always! Thanks

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  23. Thank you for a great post. Thank you, MaryLu, for another wonderful adventure!Please enter me in the drawing.

    Linda Cacaci
    LinCaca3[at]aol[dot]com

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    1. Hey Linda, thanks for coming by. and I'm throwing your name in the hat now!

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  24. Hi,
    Please enter me in the drawing...and thank you so much for the writing advice. Now to apply it, that's a different story.LOL
    May G-d continue to bless you in your writing.
    Kris

    kristine.morgan@yahoo.com

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    1. Hey Kristine, isn't that the truth! Marylu makes it look sooooo easy!

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    2. Yes, applying it is always the tricky part, isn't it? LOL Blessings on your writing!!

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  25. Great to meet you, MaryLu! Thanks for hosting, Debbie.

    Awesome tips on description! I've heard wonderful things about your book.

    loree dot huebner at yahoo dot com

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    1. thanks for coming by Loree! It is a fabulous book. A must read!! Good luck on winning!

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    2. Thanks Loree! Glad to help. :-)

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  26. One thing your writing has never been, MaryLu, and that is boring! I have read all of your books and not once was I not totally immersed and completely interested in the words streaming across the page. I own the book, but if I win, I'll donate one to our small town library, which does not have many funds for Christian fiction.

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    1. Hey Susan, great to have you stop by. I've read all of MaryLu's books too and your right, no one can accuse her of being boring.

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    2. Hi Susan!! Glad I'm not boring. Although if you ask my family, they might disagree. LOL.

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  27. Wow, so glad I stumbled upon this blog article. Your book, Veil of Tears sounds fascinating and I appreciate the writing tips. I think I need to print out your examples and keep them in front of my face. Thank you.
    Susan Karsten, jksfamily5@gmail.com

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    1. Hey Susan, I'm glad you stumbled on us, too! And I'm so glad that MaryLu's tips are helpful. She is an awesome writer. Another way to learn is just by reading some of her books. They are full of wonderful descriptions. Good luck on the drawing!

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    2. Great advice on making description part of your story. When you do this you bring your story to life and you are a master at it. Congratulations on this new release!!

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    3. Thank you, Susan!! Glad I could help you. And thanks for dropping by!!

      Carla.. thanks!! I don't know about the master stuff but I appreciate your kind words!!

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  28. Hey! Great to be here! I've always said that MaryLu adds details to her stories that do not bore you. My oldest daughter has never been much of a reader. She tends to give up reading novels after a chapter or two because the details go on and on and on! This always broke my heart, because I wanted all of my children to fall in love with reading. To learn about different places and people and cultures. But, alas, I feared Debra Dawn would never experience this. Then I came across MaryLu's novels. The way she writes puts you right in the thick of things. You experience every single step of the way as the story progresses. MaryLu has a way of describing people, places and things, that doesn't bore you, it pulls you in! For the longest time, I've been telling my daughter to try MaryLu's novels, that she would not get bored. It wasn't until MaryLu released Veil of Pearls, that Debra Dawn started to get intrigued. The era in which this novel is based is my daughter's favorite era, so she was willing to give it a try. I bought her a copy for her birthday, and she is actually reading it! She has a 4 year old son, so she reads when she can, but she is reading it. She fell in love with Adalia and her spunk; as we all did. So,even if I'd never read any of MaryLu's novels, just knowing that my daughter is reading it, tells me that the details are anything but boring. Keep up the great work, MaryLu! Hugs.
    Please enter me to win this wonderful basket of goodies!
    debsbunch5@jesusanswers.com

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    1. I'm so happy to hear that Debra Dawn is reading!! What an honor that she started with my book, but I hope she spans out now to other authors. There are so many great books out there to enjoy!

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  29. Awe that is so sweet, Debbie I'm glad your daughter is enjoying it. She'll have lots of books to read because now she can go back and read all Marylu's older releases.

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    1. I've already told her that she would enjoy MaryLu's Surrender series, because they are set during the war of 1812. I own all of MaryLu's novels, so she has a lot to choose from. God has truly blessed me in more ways than one, with MaryLu's friendship. She is a true Child of God who follows God's leading in her writing.

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    2. Ah.. thanks again, Chaplain Debbie!!

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    3. She blesses many people through her kindness, writing and friendship. We are indeed blessed to know her.

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  30. Great advice, MaryLu! I'm with you about over description! -y-a-w-n! Taking notes! I love the cover of your newest and can't wait to read it!

    DebbieLynne, nice to meet you! Thank you for hosting this! I look forward to reading more from you. {mddavix127(at)ymail (dot) c-o-m. So that's one. Your feed burner has it, too. I'm following you via blog. I told MaryLu that I was jumpin on the ship!

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    1. Nice to meet you Miriam! Thank you for jumpin on! Good luck on winning the Marylu's new release. We are doing one more give away of her Veil of Pearls this week, so be sure to stop in for that one, too!

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  31. What a fantastic lesson on writing description, MaryLu, and you are a master at it!Your characters and settings are so descriptive they simply jump off the pages, and Veil of Pearls promises to be one of your best stories yet. Thanks for the great writing tips and huge congratulations on the release of Veil of Pearls. :)

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    1. Yay! Happy to see you here, my friend. Laurie Alice stopped by early this morning. I think before most of us are up. lol.

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  32. Great article, MaryLu. I really loved your comparison of the right and wrong ways . . . and the samples from Veil of Pearls were so enticing. It's easy to slip into the habit of just describing . . . but you demonstrated a so much better way. We still got the whole picture, but as a part of the action.

    Veil of Pearls sounds terrific. I can't wait to read it.

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    1. Veil is wonderful, Lynne! It's one of those books that is worth putting at the top of the TBR pile and then curling up somewhere quiet so no one interrupts you.

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    2. Thank you, Lynne! It's much harder to describe things the right way, isn't it? Takes more work!

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  33. Hi Marylu, I just enjoy reading your books. My husband and I retreat to our camper on the weekends and I get lost in your adventures. I especially loved The Blue Enchantress, I always wondered what it would be like to be deserted on an island away from all the hustle and bustle of our lives; Thanks for taking me there.

    Please enter me in your drawing. jcsbathandbody@gmail

    Judy

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    1. Thanks Judy!! I've always dreamed of being deserted on an island too! With a handsome man (my hubby of course!) and maybe some nice pirates too. LOL. Glad you enjoyed The Blue Enchantress!

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    2. I love camping too, Judy! And I always bring a book a day to read. There is nothing better than being away from everyday life and curling up with a good book.

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  34. I love your novel-writing tips, MaryLu! I would love to be entered in the drawing!

    sarahjmcb@aol.com

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    1. Hi Sarah! Thanks for coming by!!!

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    2. Thanks for stopping by, Sarah. Throwing your name in the hat.

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  35. Hey Sarah! Glad MaryLu's tips were helpful. Throwing your name in the hat now!

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  36. I just wanted to say I really enjoyed your advice on descriptions MaryLu! I think it is simple to understand and love the examples. It really helps....a writer would want the reader to experience the book through the characters eyes. Although I am not a writer, I have always written short stories, poems, children's plays and curriculum for children's church...so this helps me too! I am never too old to learn..and I appreciate it.
    I also have to say I really enjoy MaryLu's books. I love books and have been reading Christian historical fiction since the age of 10 or younger. I have had my fill of Amish(although they were great) and had read everything my favorite authors had published...and I picked up one of MaryLu's books. I am now hooked and a huge fan. For me they are different, exciting...but also filled with the Lord..and that is important to me! Thanks for making such an impact in my life..and so many others!

    I would love being entered in the drawing: sunydey26@aol.com

    God bless,
    Johnette

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    1. Hey Johnette! Thanks for coming by. I'm glad you found MayrLu's books. They are wonderful!

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    2. I think so too DebbieLynne! I am now following your blog....seems fun...hope this is okay. God bless!

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    3. Oh goodness yes! I'm tickled to have you follow. And every time you leave a comment on one of my giveaways, mention you're a follower and you get a second entry. It's been a fun day with so many new people stopping by and getting to meet them. But alas, duty calls. I must get ready for VBS. I'm the director and we are finishing up our last two days. I'll drop back in tonight.

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    4. Bless you, Johnette!! So nice to see you here!! So many of my Motley crew have dropped in to see their captain!!

      Debbie Lynne, have fun at VBS!

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    5. oooh I direct VBS too...I will be praying for you. We finished up last week. I hope you have a ton of fun! Get some rest too Debbie Lynne...I am sure you will need it!
      MaryLu....we love our Captain and we are so very proud of you!! I am glad to find this blog too!

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  37. Was thinking about this very topic today! Printed out and am pondering. Please enter me!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Julie. I'll be throwing your name in the hat.

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    2. Glad I could help you out, Julie!!

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  38. MaryLu is a wonderful writer!

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    1. Yes, she is, Joyanne. Thanks for coming by.

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    2. Thanks JoyAnne! (Pretty name!)

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  39. I appreciated what you said in the article. You are absolutely right. Descriptions are necessary to pull the reader into the story, but they need to be part of the story, not stand-alone paragraphs.

    I'll definitely check your book out.

    Gayle
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  40. Oh, that advice just got me excited to read this book...as if I didn't want to read it already! : ) Great tips...I hope to apply them as I am trying to revamp my writing efforts. I'd love to be in the drawing...the gifts look awesome. Just what this Mama needs! : ) Blessings~Stacey
    travelingstacey(at)bellsouth(dot)net

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    1. Hey Stacey. thanks for stopping by. Looks like you have a new baby from your picture. Perfect way to relax with this box of goodies. I'm so glad these tips of MaryLu's helped and got you excited about your work. good luck in the drawing!

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    2. Stacy, (do you travel a lot? LOL) Thanks for coming by! I'm glad my tips were of help to you. :-)

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  41. Would love to win! I haven't read any of MaryLu's books yet, and Veil of Pearls seems like a great one to start with. :)

    Frequentreader19 (at) gmail (dot) com

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    1. Melanie, Girl, we need to talk. ;o) ANY of MaryLu's books are good to start with! If you haven't entered in any of this weeks drawings besides today, Monday and Wednesday post are for one of her other books and Tuesday is a bath gift box. Be sure to enter those too! And good luck!

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    Frequentreader19 (at) gmail (dot) com

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  43. Going to the library today. Hope to get one of the books mentioned on your blog.
    blaze80106@gmail.com

    Thanks Courtney

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    1. Thanks Courtney! Great idea. Here is MaryLu's book page from her website. You can see all of her books there. http://www.marylutyndall.com/books Thanks for coming by and good luck!

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  44. Oh I am excited. I hope I can win this! Thank you for being so kind

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    1. Debbie Lynne is one of the most generous people I know. She put together this gift basket herself out of her own pocket just to help me promote my book. Isn't that the sweetest thing? She's an absolute doll!
      Thanks for stopping by, Terri!

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    2. LOL! Terri, I hope you win too! And thank you, MaryLu. I was happy to do it. I've been looking forward to it for months!

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  45. I love MaryLu's books. So please enter me to win.
    I only write reviews.
    jrs362 at hotmail dot com

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  46. Thanks so much for your tips and helps for writers! I hope to someday be published, so I appreciated your insights.
    bskaggs(at)zoominternet(dot)net

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    1. I pray you'll be published too, Teddy!! Just keep working hard and staying in God's will. :-)

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    2. Tips and classes from good writers are a great way to get closer to publishing. Best wishes on your journey!

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  47. Please enter me in the drawing!!! I love MaryLu Tyndall's books, and I love anything to do with ships :) Like that beautiful, inspiring painting :) I follow with FeedBurner, as well! Thank you :)www.thetansypatch.blogspot.com

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    1. Emily.. a woman after my own heart. Another lover of tall ships! Sigh. Thanks!!

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      Thanks for coming by. And thanks for following! Good luck!

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  48. Please enter me in the drawing. I have not read any of MaryLu's books. I am definitely going to have to check her out!
    leanderson1954@yahoo.com

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    1. Oh yes, Linda! You must read one of MaryLu's books. Once you read one you'll have to read the rest. She's that good!

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  49. Hi MaryLu, Loved your post. So much valuable information for the writers here. I am looking forward to reading Veil of Pearls and Surrender the Night and have both on my wish list. Thanks for the opportunity to enter.

    misskallie2000 at yahoo dot com

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  50. MaryLu, great article and a writing lesson I needed right now. I'm going to copy this post as a reminder of how to write dynamic description. And I'm looking forward to reading Veil of Pearls on my vacation in a couple of weeks!

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    1. Hey Patty! Thanks for coming by! It's good to see you. Oh man a vacation! How I'd love to have one of those!!

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  51. Really great advice. I love the examples you included of showing not just stating it. Congrats MaryLu! :O)

    estrella8888 at roadrunner dot com

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  52. If I understood correctly, You don't just paint a picture with words but a wideo with lights, camera, action. Makes me want to read your book.

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  53. Forgot to add I am a follower and enjoy reading every blog. Thanks for the great interviews and givaways. pgmcneill@sbcglobal.net

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  54. I'm not a writer but as a reader I found this post to be very interesting.

    Please enter me into this great giveaway. I am a follower of this blog.

    Blessings
    judyjohn2004(at)yahoo(dot)com

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  55. Hey Judy! Thanks so much for coming by. We love to have readers come! Good luck on the drawing and thank you for following my blog!

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  56. I am reading Veil of Pearls and love it so far!! :) What a great week of giveaways you are having here Debbie!!

    ladettek[at]gmail[dot]com

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    1. I know! It is so good. I love it too! Every book MaryLu writes I tell her it is her best. LOL> I just love them all!

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  57. Would LOVE to win !! Thank You !Dana M Spille

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  58. After all the books you've written - you must have to dig deeper & deeper to create new scenes. I write from life's experiences on my own self but to create things out of the blue just amazes me!

    I'm trying to sign up for this newsletter & blog my internet in Nicaragua today is being a little feisty!

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  59. Awesome information on writing description. Thank you for sharing it. Will definately be a help to me. Have enjoyed your other books. Look forward to reading this one, but would love to win it first :) !!

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  60. This book looks really good! It's on my to read list.

    abbiesreadingcorner(at)gmail(dot)com

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